Ooh, I like this. I'm curious to see how they will deal with the situation.
Just a bit of concrit: you don't need to write down "flashback" and "back to present", just use the row of asterisks. Your writing is good enough that what's going on is clear.
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Date: 2006-02-27 08:36 am (UTC)Just a bit of concrit: you don't need to write down "flashback" and "back to present", just use the row of asterisks. Your writing is good enough that what's going on is clear.